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The table shows questionnaires about the opinions of club members and the general public for the new theatre in one town in 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. The given table illustrates the proportion of the both the club members’ opinions and the general public’s opinions, relating to the facilities, the information and the quality, of the new theater in town in 2012. Overall, all the three categories received a positive view from both the club members and the general public. While the club members expressed that they satisfied most with the facilities and the quality, the general public appreciated the information. Additionally, only a relatively small number of people dissatisfied with the facilities and the quality. Regarding the facilities, the excellence category saw the highest of proportion from both the club members and the public, with the figure accounted for 72% from the club participants and 64% from the public. Noticeably, there were only a small percentage of people dissatisfied with the Commented [WU1]: Mệnh đề sau with + ving With the figure accounting Commented [WU2]: Cách nhau tận 6 đơn vị thì sau nhỏ dc IELTS WRITING PLUS - MR TAN IELTS WRITING PLUS - MR TAN

Moving to the analysis of quality appraisal, an overwhelming 88% of club members commended the new theatre's quality as excellent, juxtaposed against a more reserved 53% from the general public. The satisfaction quotient constituted a modest 10% among club members, juxtaposed with a relatively higher 40% within the general public. Notably, a marginal 2% of club members found the quality lacking, while a comparably elevated 7% of the general public expressed similar sentiments. //////////////////////////////////////////////////////////// More and more people are becoming seriously overweight. Some people suggest that the solution to this problem is to increase the price of fattening foods. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Some people suggest that the best solution to deal with the rise of obesity is to increase the price of fattening foods. To a certain extent, I agree that this solution may reduce the consumption of fattening foods; however, I believe that there are some other solutions can help to tackle this problem more effectively. The issue of increasing obesity rates has prompted some individuals to propose that raising the price of fattening foods is the most effective solution. While I partially agree that this approach may reduce the consumption of such foods, I believe that there are alternative measures that can address this problem more comprehensively. Increasing the price of high-calorie foods may stop numerous individuals from buying them. This is because most of fattening foods, such as fast foods, sweets and snacks, are often sold at a cheap price to attract more buyers, leading to more people, especially who are having a low income, decide to buy them as their main source of food. Therefore, when the local authorities increase the price of fattening foods, individuals will have to carefully consider whether they should buy it or not, and they may decide to choose other foods which are much healthier and cheaper. This could help those who are becoming seriously overweight staying away from many fattening foods, as buying other kinds of foods is a much more effective way to both keeping fit and saving money. However, not all individuals are having limited budgets and cannot allow for those expensive high- calories foods which means this solution is not a long-term way to reduce the consumption of fattening foods and obesity. Admittedly, raising the price of high-calorie foods could dissuade numerous individuals from purchasing them. This is because individuals would be compelled to carefully consider Commented [WU5]: Food không đếm dc nhé Foods đếm dc là bữa ăn Commented [WU6]: That can, There are đã là chủ ngữ + động từ chính rồi Can động từ phụ bỏ vào mệnh đề quan hệ Commented [WU7]: Ko có viết ntn nhé, 1 là đồng ý 2 là không đồng ý Viết ntn chỉ dc 6.5 hoặc 7.0 nếu từ vựng ổn, muốn cao hơn thì chọn 1 trong 2 thôi em Commented [WU8]: Đầu đoạn phải có từ nối chuyển đoạn Commented [WU9]: Prevent, không ai nói stop cả Commented [WU10]: Đoạn này thừa, không cần giải thích tại sao nó rẻ cả, chỉ cần giải thích khi tăng thì ít người mua vì ng ta sẽ cân nhắc giá hơn, hết Commented [WU11]: Lặp nè thấy chưa Commented [WU12]: Sau to là động từ nguyên mẫu Keep/save Commented [WU13]: Không phải ai cũng có thể cho phép là sao Commented [WU14]: Không bền hoặc không hiệu quả trong thời gian dài Chứ ai viết không là cách hiệu quả dài là sai IELTS WRITING PLUS - MR TAN IELTS WRITING PLUS - MR TAN
whether or not to purchase them, leading them to choose healthier and more affordable alternatives. Such a shift in consumption habits could help individuals who are seriously overweight to distance themselves from such fattening food, as opting for other types of nourishment is a more effective means of maintaining physical fitness and saving money. However, it is important to note that not all individuals have limited budgets and may still be able to afford expensive high-calorie foods. Consequently, this solution may not be a sustainable long-term strategy for reducing the consumption of fattening food and addressing obesity. There are many other ways to prevent this phenomenon by focusing on improve the residents’ thinking about the negative impact of obesity on health and encourage people to engage in more outdoor activities. Firstly, the government should organize more campaigns to inform their residents about the disadvantages of consuming a huge amount of fattening foods, such as diseases relating to cardiovascular, cancer and stress. This may help many individuals realize the negative impact of eating fattening foods and may stop using them. Moreover, the local authorities should encourage their citizens to participate in more outdoor activities, namely doing exercises, running, jogging or playing some sports. Those who are serious overweight may lose more weight and keep fit after practicing these exercises and this can also inspire them to adopt a more active lifestyle. In conjunction with this, there are several other approaches that can be employed to combat this issue, primarily by focusing on improving individuals' understanding of the detrimental effects of obesity on health and promoting increased engagement in outdoor activities. Firstly, governments should organize more awareness campaigns to educate residents about the various health risks associated with consuming excessive amounts of fattening food, such as cardiovascular diseases, cancer, and stress. By doing so, many individuals may become more cognizant of the negative impact of these foods and may choose to abstain from them. Additionally, local authorities should encourage citizens to participate in more outdoor activities, such as exercise, running, jogging, or engaging in sports. For example, they can introduce rewards such as money for active participation can further incentivize individuals to participate in outdoor activities. These physical activities can contribute to weight loss and overall fitness for individuals who are seriously overweight, while also inspiring them to adopt a more active lifestyle. In conclusion, I would agree that increase the price of high-calorie foods is a conducive solution to prevent obesity, on the grounds that those who are having limited budget may not choose them as it could affect their financial plans; therefore, they may try to use other healthier and more reasonable foods. However, I believe that a multifaceted approach, including enhance the residents’ thinking and encourage more physical activities should be prioritized to effectively address this alarming health crisis. TR CC LR GR 7 7 7 6 Commented [WU15]: Qua đoạn mới phải có từ nối Commented [WU16]: Prevent phải đi với from Prevent something from something Ko đi 1 mình dc Muốn 1 mình thì dùng address/resolve/deal with Commented [WU17]: ở trên là focusing thì ở đây phải thêm ing trước and và sau and là chung 1 loại từ Commented [WU18]: tim mạch dùng heart thôi, chữ này là tính từ Commented [WU19]: số nhiều Commented [WU20]: ai ngưng, chủ ngữ câu này là this this stop đúng hay sai sai Commented [WU21]: làm ntn để encourage? Encourage là người ta đi luôn à, không thuyết phục Commented [WU22]: Giải thích làm ntn để thuyết phục Commented [WU23]: Dùng chữ khác nhe Commented [WU24]: Therefore dùng ntn sai nhé , encouraging them to .... IELTS WRITING PLUS - MR TAN IELTS WRITING PLUS - MR TAN