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T h ầ y H i ệ p S Đ T : 0 9 0 6 1 1 5 1 7 1 Page 1 of 4 Mr. Hiep’s English Classes BAR CHART: ESTIMATED WORLD LITERACY RATES BY REGION AND GENDER Estimated world literacy rates by region and gender You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. SAMPLE ANSWER Introduction: The bar chart presents a comparison of illiteracy levels among men and women across six global regions last year. Overview: It is evident that gender disparities in literacy were pronounced, with females consistently showing higher rates of illiteracy compared to their male counterparts across all depicted regions.
T h ầ y H i ệ p S Đ T : 0 9 0 6 1 1 5 1 7 1 Page 2 of 4 Notably, South Asia registered the highest illiteracy rates, while industrialized nations reported the lowest. Detail 1: In detail, South Asia emerged as the region most affected by illiteracy, with 55% of females and 34% of males unable to read or write, in stark contrast to industrialized countries, where the literacy rates were uniformly high, with only a mere/nominal 1.5% of both genders reported as illiterate. In comparison, Sub-Saharan Africa and the Arab States exhibited similar patterns, with illiteracy rates approximately 30% for males and 50% for females. Detail 2: The analysis of other regions reveals divergent trends. East Asia, for instance, displayed a significant gender imbalance, with the ratio of illiterate women to illiterate men being approximately 2:1. Conversely, the Latin American and Caribbean regions showed a more balanced scenario, with nearly equal illiteracy rates among genders, closely approximating a 1:1 ratio. Conclusion: The bar chart starkly illustrates regional disparities in literacy, highlighting the particularly acute challenges faced in South Asia and the Middle East. These insights underscore the pressing need for targeted educational interventions to mitigate these disparities. SAMPLE ANSWER: BAND 9 LEVEL The graphic shows global rates of illiteracy for last year broken down by both gender and area. It is evident that there are great discrepancies in literacy rates according to both geographic location and sex. What is most striking when looking at the data is the fact that the burden of illiteracy is disproportionately borne by women, wherever they hail from. In almost every region on the planet, the number of women who cannot read is significantly higher than the number of illiterate men; in East Asia and Oceania, as well as in the developed countries, it is actually double. Only in Latin America and the Caribbean is there little disparity between the genders in literacy rates. The geographical distribution of education is also plain in this chart. Men everywhere are less likely to be unable to read and write than women: however, in some parts of the world, extremely significant segments of the whole population are illiterate. This is most marked in South Asia, the Arab states and Sub-Saharan Africa where approximately half of all women do not possess literacy skills, a lack they share with a third of all men. In East Asia, a fifth of women and 10% of men are uneducated in reading and writing. This is in stark contrast with developed countries, where the proportion of illiterates is truly marginal, even though the absolute number of women is nevertheless double that of men. Overall, we can see that there are great differences in educational provision across the globe and that (leaving aside Latin America and the Caribbean) the lion’s share of illiteracy is given to women. (Word-count: 271) 1. TASK ACHIEVEMENT: This answer covers all aspects of the task completely. 2. COHERENCE AND COHESION: Linking words and expressions are used in such a way that they attract no attention from the reader. 3. LEXICAL RESOURCE: There are no problems with spelling, word choice or word formation. 4. GRAMMATICAL RANGE AND ACCURACY: The range of structures is greater. Errors are only minor slips typical of native speaker writing.
T h ầ y H i ệ p S Đ T : 0 9 0 6 1 1 5 1 7 1 Page 3 of 4 SAMPLE ANSWER: BAND 8 LEVEL The bar chart shows global rates of illiteracy broken down by gender and also area for last year. It is clear that some areas have a much higher proportion of people who are unable to read or write. It is interesting to note that approximately half of women in South Asia, Arab States and Sub Saharan Africa cannot read or write with the majority of women in south Asia and the Arab states are illiterate. This is compared with roughly a third of men. In the rest of the world rates of illiteracy are much lower with nearly everybody living in developed countries being able to read and write, falling to approximately 90% in Latin American and Caribbean countries. However, there are more illiterate women than men, especially in East Asia/Oceania. Overall, although there are great disparations in literacy across the globe, women are much less likely to be able to read or write. (Word-count: 154) 1. TASK ACHIEVEMENT: This answer covers the task sufficiently. It presents, highlights and illustrates key features clearly. But to gain band 9, it must do these things completely. 2. COHERENCE AND COHESION: Paragraphing is sufficiently managed and all linking words and expressions are used well. Ideas are sequenced logically. There is sufficient, appropriate use of paragraphing with no overuse of linking words and expressions. 3. LEXICAL RESOURCE: Rare errors in spelling, word formation or word choice are permitted. To gain band 9, they must be absent. 4. GRAMMATICAL RANGE AND ACCURACY: This answer uses a wide range of structures. Almost all sentences are error-free. SAMPLE ANSWER: BAND 7 LEVEL The bar chart shows the rate of illiteracy in different parts of the world, broken down into men and women last year. Overall, we can see that there is big difference in different parts of the world but that woman are much less likely to be able to be literate. We can see that people living in Sub Saharan Africa, South Asia, and Arab States are much more likely to be illiterate. Approximately half women in these countries is unable to read or write with the figure as high as 56% in South Asia. However, the figure for men is lower, at around 30%. However, this is still high. In contrast, in other countries the vast majority of people read and write. In developed countries nearly everybody is literate. However, there are slight more women with illiteracy than men. In East Asia and Oceania it is clear that there is big difference between men and women. Less than ten percent of men are illiterate but for women the figure is more than double at 20%. (Word-count: 174) 1. TASK ACHIEVEMENT: Key features of the data are presented, but could be highlighted more clearly. 2. COHERENCE AND COHESION: This answer uses a range of linking words, but some are used too much. More variety would improve the band score. 3. LEXICAL RESOURCE: There is a sufficient range of vocabulary, including collocations. But a greater range would be needed for a higher band. There may be some errors in word choice, spelling or word formation. 4. GRAMMATICAL RANGE AND ACCURACY: There are too many errors to gain band 8. There are not enough complex structures to gain band 8. SAMPLE ANSWER: BAND 6 LEVEL The bar chart shows the percentages of men and women with illiteracy in different parts of the world last year. Overall, we can see that women are higher levels of illiteracy than men.
T h ầ y H i ệ p S Đ T : 0 9 0 6 1 1 5 1 7 1 Page 4 of 4 Develop countries have the lowest levels of illiteracy on the chart. Only one percent of men and two percent of women are illiteracy. However, in Latin American and Caribbean countries the percent is higher with ten percent of men and little more women. Moreover, In East Asia and Oceania less men are illiterate than in Latin America and Caribbean countries but the figure for women is much more higher at 20%. In Sub Saharan Africa rates are more than twice in East Asia and Oceania. More than thirty percent of men and a little lesser than fifty percent of women. On the other hand in Arab states this gap is even more with less than thirty percentage of men and more than fifty percent of women can’t read or write. South Asia has the highest illiteracy rates on the chart for both men and women. (Word-count: 178) 1. TASK ACHIEVEMENT: There is an overview, but it is not complete. Your overview must interpret the data completely to gain band 7. 2. COHERENCE AND COHESION: Information and paragraphs are not organised in the best way. Linking words are used, but not correctly. 3. LEXICAL RESOURCE: The vocabulary in this answer is limited. Some less common words are used, but not correctly. To gain band 7, you must use less common words, and make fewer errors. 4. GRAMMATICAL RANGE AND ACCURACY: This answer only uses the present simple verb form - you will get a better mark if you use a wider range of structures. Many sentences have errors. SAMPLE ANSWER: BAND 5 LEVEL The chart shows estimated world illiteracy rates, by gender and by region last year. There are six different regions: Developed countries, Latin America/Caribbean, East Asia/Oceania, Sub Saharan Africa, Arab states and South Africa. Developed countries are with the lowest illiteracy rates. both the men and the women are small percentage, and the men slightly smaller than the women. In Latin American and Caribbean countries the men and the women are similar percentage, the men at ten and the women slightly higher. In East Asia the men are less than ten, smaller than Latin American and Caribbean. The women more than double this at 20. Sub Saharan Africa the men are just over 30% illiteracy and the women much more at 48%. This gap even bigger for Arab states, less than 30 men have illiteracy and more than 50 women. South Asia biggest illiteracy rates for the men and women. Men are 35 percentage and the women are 56. (Word-count: 158) 1. TASK ACHIEVEMENT: There is no overview. You cannot get more than band 5 if you do not write an overview. The answer is also short, because too many words are copied from the question. 2. COHERENCE AND COHESION: Ideas are not organised into any analysis. You will get better marks if you organise the ideas- for instance, by going from lowest to highest, or perhaps talking about men, then women, or by contrasting men and women. 3. LEXICAL RESOURCE: Too many words are copied from the question, or repeated. You must show the examiner that you know a lot of words to get a good mark. You don't do this by copying or repeating. 4. GRAMMATICAL RANGE AND ACCURACY: There are only simple sentences and structures. You must include complex sentences and more difficult structures to gain band 6. There are so many mistakes it is difficult to understand.